Ouch

Finally spoke to my producer friend who read my horror/thriller. Basically, he said he read through it and put it down. Another words, he didn't get through it in one read. Not even sure he finished it. Either he doesn't like my writing or he doesn't respect the art of screenwriting/screenwriters. Not sure which.

On this script he thought the plotting and structure were much better than previous scripts of mine that he's read, but he thought the dialogue was killer. As in, not good. Stilted. Apparently, that was the one and only stumbling block. He suggested I put aside whatever I'm writing now and read 6 or 7 pro scripts that I have not seen the movie for, or scripts that have recently sold. He offered to send me a few scripts that sold and are in development. I think I may take him up on his offer. And I will certainly take a look at all of my dialogue, though I don't think it's all that bad. He suggested I rewrite all of the dialogue. Ouch.

The good news is he seemed to like the concept and thought it could be shot for very little money. When he read page one he got excited because he knows someone looking for an Asian-style horror and the first page in my script takes place in Asia. However, it veers off in a different direction after that. He said I should rewrite it to set it in Asia. Not sure if he was serious or not, so I don't think I'm going do that.